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Malc

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What do you think of these?
« on: March 06, 2011, 09:09:27 AM »
I'm starting to get back on my submission horse now, I sent a batch off to Prospect and made a sale, so it's all good for the UK account.

This is a lovely little boutique one-stop shop for criticism without the usual minority of idiots one has to out up with on other forums, so I'd like to put these up for your comments -send or not send?

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Malc

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #1 on: March 06, 2011, 09:37:29 AM »
I sometimes have a number of alternative punchlines for the same image, so here are two, do you think one is more effective than the other? Both rubbish?

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Offline Roger Kettle

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #2 on: March 06, 2011, 09:47:18 AM »
Love them all, Malc, and I really can't choose between the two tramp punchlines. Why not do a series of cartoons with them?
The "snow-shaker" gag is a cracker.
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Offline The Peepmaster

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #3 on: March 06, 2011, 09:49:09 AM »
Pin number one was laugh-out loud for me. The second one funny too, but not to the same extent.

Mind you, that's just MY opinion and not a canoodling hatstand that whistles "Take me to the Parking Lot on Alternate Wednesdays, Mr Snodgrass".

(Sorry to hear you get just a minority of idiots on other forums.)
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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #4 on: March 06, 2011, 10:35:26 AM »
I liked the snowshaker joke a lot. Was not too keen on the others.
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Vulture

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #5 on: March 06, 2011, 01:07:46 PM »


All brilliant, but if I had to list a preference.......

Snowshaker
Pin number
Face book
Beg
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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #6 on: March 06, 2011, 01:13:05 PM »
Send, send, pin number.

Snow globe, brilliant!  ;D
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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #7 on: March 06, 2011, 05:27:47 PM »
Love the artwork, Malc.  Snowglobe was the bestest.  Perhaps suggest you emphase 'really' in the loans one.  Liked the PIN but not sure about Facebook as there is no link to him having a computer, mobile etc, yet he would have had a credit card and PIN before he forgot.
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Malc

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #8 on: March 06, 2011, 05:38:40 PM »
Thanks for those, folks.
I'm thinking of making the Loans guy smaller at his desk, accentuating his diminutive stature and suggesting that he is on a power trip.

On the other hand, making him bigger would also work,  -that way life has given him physical size and social dominance. I think the problem is the fact he's medium-sized. Yes, that's it.
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Offline Diane CBPFC

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #9 on: March 06, 2011, 06:08:51 PM »
I love them all. I think your artwork is brilliant - all the little details, such as the secretary having a plaid skirt, are awsome.

Out of the two drunks - I prefer the PIN number punch line but the FB was funny too.

The loan joke works for me with the loan officer the size he is, as he already looks small in his chair.
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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #10 on: March 06, 2011, 06:23:29 PM »
Quote from: Malc on March 06, 2011, 05:38:40 PM
Thanks for those, folks.
I'm thinking of making the Loans guy smaller at his desk, accentuating his diminutive stature and suggesting that he is on a power trip.

On the other hand, making him bigger would also work,  -that way life has given him physical size and social dominance. I think the problem is the fact he's medium-sized. Yes, that's it.

Make the guy a dalek. In fact, make them all daleks.
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Jerry Attrick

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #11 on: March 06, 2011, 07:41:59 PM »
Snowglobe - magic!!!
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Feather

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #12 on: March 06, 2011, 08:57:25 PM »
I loved the snow globe and the pin number ones. I thought both of these should go in "The New Yorker." 
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Diamond Lil

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #13 on: March 07, 2011, 01:42:54 PM »
ditto!
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Malc

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Re: What do you think of these?
« Reply #14 on: March 08, 2011, 12:19:54 AM »
OK - Another one.
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