The Fine Art of Strip Writing

[Roger Kettle]

Yep. Even better.
Okay, there is a slight complication with this. We're talking about Andy Capp (I've worked out) and we KNOW his regular pub. Not only that, but the landlord, Jack, is a regular in the strip so that causes a problem. Is Jack the landlord of the pub Andy no longer goes to or the landlord Andy is complaining to?
I still like the basic idea and am tempted to use it in a different area. Perhaps the mother-in-law thing.
Andy talking to Jack at the bar: "...so the the whole thing came to a head tonight---I'm never going to speak to Flo's mum again. Let's see how she handles that!"
Chalkie enters. " That's weird---your mother-in-law just kissed me."
NAH! Still not right but there's something there...

[Mince]

So you didn't like mine.

[Vulture]

I've amended the first frame, to make it clearer it's a paub he's talking about.

Look, I know I'm half-Chinese and NOT a cartoonist, but what the **** is a 'paub'?

[The Peepmaster]

Yep. Even better.
Okay, there is a slight complication with this. We're talking about Andy Capp (I've worked out) and we KNOW his regular pub. Not only that, but the landlord, Jack, is a regular in the strip so that causes a problem. Is Jack the landlord of the pub Andy no longer goes to or the landlord Andy is complaining to?
I still like the basic idea and am tempted to use it in a different area. Perhaps the mother-in-law thing.
Andy talking to Jack at the bar: "...so the the whole thing came to a head tonight---I'm never going to speak to Flo's mum again. Let's see how she handles that!"
Chalkie enters. " That's weird---your mother-in-law just kissed me."
NAH! Still not right but there's something there...

He's in the new pub, Roger. Obviously a very distinctive different landlord, and a different decor. Of course, it's only a short-lived fall-out.

[The Peepmaster]

I've amended the first frame, to make it clearer it's a paub he's talking about.

Look, I know I'm half-Chinese and NOT a cartoonist, but what the **** is a 'paub'?

It's a pub. Or at least an anagram of "a pub".

[Tarquin Thunderthighs lll]

He's in the new pub, Roger. Obviously a very distinctive different landlord, and a different decor.

Look at that - he's only been in the self-appointed job five minutes and he's causing the artist extra hassle.

[Vulture]

I've amended the first frame, to make it clearer it's a paub he's talking about.

Look, I know I'm half-Chinese and NOT a cartoonist, but what the **** is a 'paub'?

It's a pub. Or at least an anagram of "a pub".

Ah, so. It's a 'a pub'!

[Roger Kettle]

So you didn't like mine.

It was perfect and required no comment.

[Vulture]

So you didn't like mine.

It was perfect and required no comment.

Crawler!

[Tarquin Thunderthighs lll]

So you didn't like mine.

It was perfect and required no comment.

I agree.

Even banality has its own state of perfection.

[Mince]

So you didn't like mine.

It was perfect and required no comment.

You're being sarcastic now, aren't you?

[The Peepmaster]

Banality Man.